The sound of breaking glass filled my ears. I couldn’t move. I heard Snoop’s car driving off in the distance. The road had sharp glass everywhere sticking in my arms. Cars were passing by and no one stopped. “Is this where I die on a cold asphalt road all alone ?” I thought. Then my mind went cold.
A Few hours earlier....
“Time for business.” Snoop said as I pulled into his driveway. I was hoping for the best but I was still shaking.
“Hey yo Snoop look what the cat drug in.” Someone snickered. I wanted to just punch that guy in the mouth but I had to stay calm. “What’s up Snoop?” I said trying to start the best conversation I can.
“ Nothin much man nothin much.” I knew he was prepared to do anything to get what he wants.
“ Listen I need my money,” I said calmly All of the sudden Snoop’s face got stone cold. It gave me goosebumps.
“Then where is my d**** grill?!? Cause I sure as heck don’t got one?” He said starting to yell.
“I made you two but they never fit cause yo’ teeth aint straight!” I said as my voice seemed to get louder.
“Well I will pay you when you make a grill to fit my F***** mouth!” Now he was screaming. I knew this was getting serious. My hands were getting sweaty but I knew I could still beat the crap out of him. He came toward me my hands were swinging hitting the mark each time. I knew I had to leave or his buddies would get in on this. I started running to my car.
“ Man this is bulls***!” I yelled as I got into my car.
My tires skidded out of the driveway. I saw them getting into their car. I sped off and their car got smaller and smaller the faster I drove. The whole time I was looking for them my heart was racing. I was about to pull into my road but then I saw them. Clear as day. I kept going hoping they wouldn’t turn onto my street and try to hurt my family. But they didn’t they were coming straight for me.
My tires screeched and and skidded around the turns. The road felt like ice. I couldn’t control my car. I could see their faces now. I was sweating and the steering wheel felt like butter. I prayed a quick prayer and hoped for the best.
“BAM!” My car went sliding across the intersection like an ice skater on ice. Then It rolled I flew out of the window rolling to a stop. I could hear glass falling like rain. I could hear Snoop’s car racing off in a distance. I felt nothing no pain at all. Then it went blank. I opened up my eyes to see people around me I was so confused.I started to punch and yell. “Get off me!” I said tiredly but loud. Then I fell to the ground my mind went blank and cold.
ayeeeee this was really good @karlee
ReplyDeletethis is really deep
ReplyDeleteThat was a very nice story.
ReplyDeleteWhy did you stop there?
ReplyDeleteWhoaaaa!, thats a beast karlee!!!!
ReplyDeleteFiction (even though this is based on a true story) isn't an easy thing to do...using dialogue, keeping the plot moving forward, creating suspense. This all can be tricky, but you nailed it. Keep writing.
ReplyDeleteI liked your story it was very interesting and neat
ReplyDeletethis was very intresting dude he has that thug life
ReplyDeleteThat was a great story and it was really deep
ReplyDeleteThat was amazing
ReplyDeleteKarlee! You've come such a long way! Great characterization through dialogue and internal monologue. I want to know what happens next! Is this part 1 of a series?
ReplyDeleteSo far my fav part is "Is this where I die on a cold asphalt road?"
You are SO talented! Keep writing!
ReplyDelete-Emma :D